'Choice' - First Draft Feedback

My views on the first draft so far; 

• There is some out of focus shots that we are using in the first draft,
• Some of the shots aren't very stable such as the tracking shot,
• The audio in the scenes isn't very good at the minute,
• Need to finish the editing to make sure that the video flows from one shot to another,
• The dialogue audio is good and clear,
• There is props and lights in the background

My questions;

1. How would you rate the quality of the shots?
2. What did you enjoy about the video?
3. What needs improving?
4. Can you see the pieces of the narrative?
5. Were the locations varying enough?
6. how was the acting?
7. From what you have heard, What did you think of the dialogue?
8. Can you see the David Fincher Conventions? Are the Obvious?
9. What part of the editing did you like? Why?
10. What level would you give it and why?

November feedback

You have added character outlines

Production schedule and shooting schedule shows planning and an equipment list shows an understanding of technology and shows ambition in planning.

A list of shots for scene 1 shows attention to detail.

The post on a target audience needs writing. It has been left unfinished which seems to be a theme. This lack of completion needs to be dealt with before submission.

The script is excelllent showing collaboration and planning at level 4. However, you must ensure that you play a full part in all elements of the prodiuction.

Documenting the process is essential and there are gaps at present.  Make an effort to publish all research and planning

Move on to gain audience feedback about your first cut.

Avoid complacency and keep posting regularly.

Document your creative journey and your involvement.

This production shows promise and you should be gaining the higher grades.  It would be a shame if you flatter to deceive.

Stay on task.  I know that you are spending a lot of time editing and we are about to see the results of this. However, don't lose marks for the other parts.

'Choice' - Day 4 of filming

We have finished filming choice after 4 weeks of filming. We have done the re-shoots that we needed to do and all of the shots that we set out to do even some of the experimental ones. This is a big part of the film finished now because  I had looked through all of the shots to determine that they where good enough and the dialogue was clear enough. Now Me and Tony start on the editing. This is something that will probably take the most time because it is the thing that needs to make the film perfect because we have to edit all of the 200 shots that we got down into and edit. But then we have to colour grade, sound mix and remove anything from the shots that shouldn't be there. The post production is by far the biggest thing we have to do.